Wednesday, March 04, 2009

Peer Review

Now that you have posted work on your webpages, it is time to review your classmates' pages and to comment on them. It is called peer review. You will select the 2 classmates that follow your name on the list and any other classmate's page to peer review. You will do three peer reviews of the Irony essay. If there is no Irony essay, go to the next classmate.

We will use the following peer review protocol: I heard, I noticed, I wondered.

One way to avoid the pitfalls of peer review is to use the "I heard, I noticed, I wondered" method. With these prompts, you can provide useful feedback to a writer without being too biting in your criticism.

I heard...
As a reviewer, first try to summarize what you think the piece was about. This is the easy part. Tell the writer what you saw as the story or the main idea. As a writer, listen to this section, and try to hear whether or not you communicated what you were trying to communicate.

I noticed...
As a reviewer, tell the author about some of the things that attracted your attention. What worked well? What details seemed especially vivid or striking? What will you remember about this paper? As a writer, think about why the reviewer noticed these things, and how you can make all your writing as effective.

I wondered...
As a reviewer, did you have any questions when you finished reading? Did you not understand what something meant, or why it was included? Did something bother or disturb you? Did you suspect something might have worked better another way? This section is your chance to ask the writer all these questions. As a writer, try to answer the reviewer's questions. Look at your writing again, and see if there is any way to make those points clearer to a reader.

You will be writing your comments in WORD and then copy and paste them on this blog as per Ted's instructions.

36 comments:

Anonymous said...

Hello Adonnia. In your essay about irony, I heard the fact that you think irony has a lot do with surprises. Honestly after reading what you wrote I'm thinking the same exact way. I never actually thought of it that way. The poem, the short story, the excerpt, and your explanation about irony are all making me think the way you do. I noticed that you used a lot of real world experiences about the situations to help make irony stand out and it actually helped me understand more and more about irony. I will always remember your introduction because that example you used happens to be one of my favorite songs also. I really liked that example. Some details that especially stood out to me were the specific real world situations. I noticed you used things that are getting people attention today. After I was done reading I was still wondering what the excerpt about “The House That Slaves Built” by Gardiner Harris was about. That’s the only thing I really worried about when I was done reading.

Anonymous said...

Hello Alexia. In your essay about irony, I heard a lot about how irony is something just unexpected. I noticed you used a lot of quotes from your sources to support your explanation about irony. As I was reading your essay I was getting confused because it was as if you were just throwing things in there and half of it wasn’t really making sense. A lot of people may get confused reading this. Some may be thinking, what exactly was the purpose of putting this in this piece, while others might be thinking okay now that actually makes sense there.

Anonymous said...

Hello Christina. I heard that you think irony is something that people really can’t avoid. While reading I see you feel like it does play a major role in people lives today and they basically have to deal with it. You rely on irony to help you get threw obstacles in your life and it help you make decisions that you need. I noticed that to explain irony in the 3 sources that you used, you explained the good parts of the stories and then the bad which is where the irony came in. I will always remember the short story you used because as you explained it I got the idea of irony more and more. I honestly didn’t have any problems reading this paper.

Anonymous said...

Dear Mike,

I’m going to start off by saying the visual of your page is great. It was neat and easy to read. You have simple examples, but good enough to understand the meaning of irony. Another thing I noticed about the first paragraph is that it made me laugh, which is great. Humor is always welcomed.
The second paragraph, if you’re going to give examples from the story you have to make sure you’re telling it correctly. Also don’t leave your readers wondering by using the word “something”. You have examples from the stories and you put everything together wonderfully.
I notice that in your last two paragraphs you were very vague, and quick. Point out the irony, and explain it. There are many readers just like myself who has a hard time understanding if it’s not specifically explained. Last but not least, I really like how you closed your whole page with the last sentence. It was a great sum-up line. Very good job!

Anonymous said...

HELLO Christina,


I Heard: that Irony is totally unexpected and that you feel as if Irony will always play a part in your life. When I think about it now, I agree with you. You’ve looked at Irony from a different perspective than everyone else. You realized, as you said that “you’ve been told something and shown another”. I read that the lesson behind Irony in this essay is to Always Expect The Unexpected.


I Noticed: You have a great understanding of the word Irony and how it can be expressed. You’ve read the story called "Lamb to the slaughter" written by Roald Dahl. I didn’t choose that one but the irony used in that story was a good example and shocking. Who would have thought she’d pull off a crime so smooth as she did. What attracted my attention was the fact that she used a Lamb to kill him but convinced that detectives to eat it. That means the evidence is gone and that’s nasty they’ve eaten dirty meat. I enjoyed reading what you wrote. I didn’t know that you could actually commit a murder like this.


I Wonder: what made you pick Roald Dahl’s story and not the other ones? What was it that caught your attention to make you say “I have to read this”? I also wonder how did she use the lamb to kill him. Maybe she bulged him to death with it when it was frozen. I guess I have to read the story.

Anonymous said...

Dear T’keyah,
I have read your irony pieces and I have to say I liked it a lot. The first paragraph I noticed it had great details, which allowed me to understand the concept of irony better. It also gave me ideas of how to improve my pieces. The second paragraph, on “Richard Cory” was also very good because it was short and straight to the point. The last one was the only one I felt you could of done better. I can tell you weren’t finished because I didn’t understand why the poem was ironic.
What attracts me to your writing the most is that you don’t have a lot of descriptions and details but you have enough to not leave your readers wondering. Your writing is short and straight to the point. Great Job!

Anonymous said...

Hey, ALEXIA VELEZ


I heard: That Irony exists in several different cases and there are different types of Irony. I see that you could relate to Irony in your daily life and the example you gave was impressive. It’s an example of someone smiling everyday but deep down inside they’re not happy and you’ll never imagine what’s going on with them.


I Noticed: Your page is well organized and you gave a brief description of everything using interesting details. I chose the story “The Necklace” by GUY de MAUPASSANT also and I see that we had different opinions on the Irony in the story. It was good to see how you looked at it and how I looked at it because it made me think more and see that there were another Ironic lesson to be learned besides the one I’ve chosen.


I wonder: I wonder why you said “she replaced a necklace that wasn't real by worrying so much how she looks and how she would fit in” as the ironic outcome. There’s nothing wrong with it but I just would like to know because that’s a good idea that I didn’t realize on my own.

Anonymous said...

Dear Tamica,

I loved your first paragraph. The way you gave us [readers] a great detailed definition of irony. You have different examples, which allows me to really understand the concept. The only negative thing I have to say about it is that you re-worded one of your examples at the end, which I don’t feel you even need to since you have so many already.
As for your second paragraph I think you started off great! You gave details from the stories, and examples of how people viewed Richard Cory, but after you revealed the ending I think everything else wasn’t necessary. I couldn’t really understand how the quote was ironic. Maybe you should of either explain more, rearrange it, or remove it. Last, remind the readers at the end what was the purpose of the paragraph.
Overall I think you’re a good writer, you use great words, and its detailed, which I like. Keep up the good work!

Anonymous said...

By: Michael Watt

As I’ve read Munique Soares’s work about irony, I can see clearly that she knows what irony is. From what I notice about the work is that there weren’t enough examples from her experience with irony in their life. I like the copy and pasting but there should be more paragraph formats. The one sentence ending to the ironic stories she wrote seems cool. I’m loaded with several questions like, in her take on the poem, what were the many examples of irony as you stated in your second sentence. I wonder, has your life been perfect or you haven’t experienced irony yet? Other than that, I like it.

Anonymous said...

By: Michael Watt

I heard a lot about irony in Kevin’s work. His experience in irony was when he put so much effort into getting a job at Fossil but instead got hired in Lindt Chocolate. It’s like he could have been hired in Fossil but he chose another store. I noticed that he capture the irony in the “Richard Cory” poem. His take on the story, “The Gift Of Magi” showed me the irony in that story because I read it and got bored. I can see now that the characters’ Della and Jim were trying to get the other person a gift and made sacrifices but in the end, “neither one was able to use the present due to the sacrifice they had to make.” I learned in his work about the article, “The House That Slaves Built.” The information that I forgot to include was what he had in it. It was the part about Booker T. Washington being another famous black guest into the White House after blacks weren’t allow in. I wonder what are the many forms of irony that he mentioned at the end of his work.

Anonymous said...

Hazel Benitez


Reviewed: Kevin Behrman

I heard that irony to you is when somebody expects something to happen but something else happens instead. The whole piece supported this definition. Each paragraph showed this and gave explanations and details for each story to support that.

I noticed that you had a good idea of what irony is. I liked how you gave some details of each story and gave examples or facts from that story. You explained the irony in each piece very well and clearly. I like how the conclusion blended in with the rest. You restated the main points of each paragraph but didn’t say that same thing over again. It was interesting how the introduction included an example or irony in your own life.

I wondered what you meant in the last sentence of the 4th paragraph. It doesn’t really make sense to me. I think I have a sense of what you were trying to say but it’s not really clear.

Anonymous said...

Dear mike,
I have read your definition of irony and found it rather enlightening. In addition I find it amusing that you relate irony to school work because personally its shocking to see a straight a student get one bad grade. However I don’t fell it was I ironic you didn’t get on that roller coaster that is just plain chicken. What I did not understand is why you found the part of the short story “The Dangerous game” ironic at the end. I understand the hunter being hunted but what did the bed have to do with the irony and how did you conclude that Rainsford would die. I also wondered if you feel the name of the White House should be changed because of the situation with our new president. Do you feel that the White House is named that because the ethnicity of our past presidents, or is it just because of the color of the building? Get back at me on that subject because it seems like a pretty interesting topic to pick at, and I would like your point of view on the matter.

Anonymous said...

Dear Munique,
I have read what irony means to you, and I find your definition of irony very simplified. Your explanation proves to be very blunt and easy to understand, however I couldn’t help but notice that you explain irony as the difference between what is said and what is done. I was just wondering if that is always the case? Does irony only occur when something is said and another thing is done? Or can irony occur with just actions or even just words for that matter? In addition I noticed that in the story “The Necklace” by Guy de Maupassant you found greed to be a form of irony. Does this mean irony has no face? Or is irony something that only occurs in specific situations?

Anonymous said...

Hazel Benitez
Ms. Benitez has written a good stable essay that broke everything down into details. I do agree with most of what she had said but there were points where I found it wasn’t necessary to introduce to the readers. As a reader, I can understand what the meaning of irony is about. Not only does Ms. Benitez express how irony works but she also manage to express the way that it’s always going to turn up in our daily lives. No matter what form its being expressed whether it’s through a conversation or while reading book, irony will have it’s time to shine.

Anonymous said...

By: Michael Watt

In Alexia’s work about irony, I heard about her having mood swings and she got a real essay going on. I think you were saying that it’s ironic for you to be happy with someone who didn’t give a present to you but someone who does, you’ll get mad at them as a result of your mood swings. I noticed that she caught the life lesson in the story “The Necklace” which Is part of the irony. I wonder if that story is her favorite?

Anonymous said...

Kevin Behrman
Mr. Behrman at the beginning gives an example of irony that I , myself , think had nothing to do with the meaning of irony. Mentioning the fact that he worked hard to get a job at Fossil yet manage to get another job somewhere isn’t a valid example of what irony means. Mr. Behrman wrote an excellent paragraph on the short story “The Gift of Magi” which showed that irony was introduced and produced. To my knowledge, because he wrote it so well I managed to understand and visualize what this young man was saying thus helping me as a reader to understand the concept of his writing. One of the Irony examples that he had mentioned from the short story was that it was around Christmas time and the two main characters, Della and Jim, a young married couple that cared for the other deeply enough to do anything for one another even if that meant selling something special to them to get a gift for the other. The irony Mr. Behrman had introduced was that Della had cut off all her hair to sell it so she could buy Jim the chain that he wanted for his watch but since he didn’t know what she was planning he went and sold his watch to buy Della a set of combs that she wanted. Selling something important to you to buy the other a gift then later finding out they did the same, this is considered irony because its for the same meaning but different idea. All the information that Mr. Behrman had written for the assignment was well put but some of the grammar and the use of punctuation was off key at some points.

Anonymous said...

Dear Munique,
Thanks a lot for the positive feedback and letting me know where you were confused because now that I know these things, I can go back and fix it to make my writing perfect.

Anonymous said...

Dear Kevin
I looked over your meaning of irony, and I am fond of how you phrased your definition. I noticed you said that irony is when some one expects a situation to go a certain way, but is that always the case? Does irony only happen when someone expects something or can it happen at any time? For example if you were walking home and you were robbed but you never been mugged before is that Ironic? You didn’t expect it however it was a turn of events that occurred almost out of thin air. Does irony have anything to do with some ones emotions or state of mind? And where does it come from? In the last paragraph you stated irony is when an African American is in the White House. Is it also irony if a Spanish or Chinese man can into the White House? In addition is irony something that people put a label on, in other words is something only ironic if a person claims it to be.
Michael Patrick

Anonymous said...

Hello Christine!

As I opened your page the first thing I noticed was the display picture you had with different phrases that represent who you are and I liked that a lot. It helped tell me a little about yourself before I started reading your blogs. I heard that the way you use irony is sometimes with sarcasm, which I do at times myself. Your definition of irony was right on the money. I agree completely about it always accompanying with its presence.

I noticed that your very creative and you have a good vocabulary, which is rare nowadays. Some of the words you used and how you put together your sentences was very neat and understandable. The details you gave about The Money’s Paw being thought to be something that brings good to one’s life but unknowingly does the opposite was well understood as irony. It showed how people who believed in it so much actually wasn’t ready for what exactly they were putting their faith into.

I wonder what made you pick that story to read and write about? Also, how did the end of the story turn out with the people who believed in it since it was cast with that spell? What was your overall thoughts and feelings bout the story and its way of using irony?

Anonymous said...

Hello Hazel!

While reading your blog I was able to put my thoughts and your thoughts together. I heard a lot about how you feel that irony is everywhere even when we don’t know it’s around us. I also heard you say that authors sometimes use irony to criticize an issue in society by changing the way he/she states it indirectly, which I agree with 100 percent.

I noticed that your vocabulary and use of sentences were well written. While reading your summary of the story “the Most Dangerous Game”, I noticed that you were able to recognize the irony used within it. I liked how you also used your own opinion of the story to show its irony. You said it was ironic to you because in the beginning of the story you thought it was going to be about a haunted island or something to that nature but instead it turned out to be about a game that a man use on people but ended up being the target himself. From your summary I was able to be persuaded that it is a good story, which is good.

I wonder what made you want to read this story? Was it the title, author? Also what was your reaction after finding out that his game turned out to be played on him? Would you recommend this short story to a peer of yours?

Anonymous said...

Hello Kevin Behrman!

On your blog I noticed the different colors you had and I thought it showed a creative side to you. As I started to read what you wrote about irony itself, I heard a lot about how irony is when a situation expected to happens ends up going completely different, which I agree with you fully. Also you gave a good example of what it was by sharing a situation you once had with a job. I thought by giving that example you helped your reader get a better understanding of irony.

I noticed that in your summary of the story “ The Gift Of Magi”, you were able to explain the whole story quickly and smoothly. Your explanation of how they both went out of their way to get one another’s gift for Christmas was right on the money. You were able to give the exact examples of the things they did while showing the irony within both situations.

I wonder what made to want to read and write about this story? What caught your attention, the title, or the author? Did you enjoy reading it? Was it the kind of story you thought it was going to be? What was your reaction towards the irony that was used in the story? If you was able to recommend it to a peer of yours would you?

Anonymous said...

Michael Patrick
Mr. Patrick started off well. Explaining the meaning of Irony and giving an example to back it up. The example that he used was Irony but it was explained in a sad way. Knowing that an innocent child died is really hard to deal with especially if you know you can not do anything about it. All we can do is sit back and let nature take its course and as he said “Irony is in our everyday lives”. Sorry for your loss Michael. When you write something especially a summary of a story, you must get right to the point and stop mentioning the same information over and over. Another than this issue, you have written the right information about the story. Ok. I did not read the story “The Most Dangerous Game” but from what I am reading there is some information missing and some of the writing doesn’t make sense to me. Like is said about the “Richard Cory” story, you must stop writing the same stuff over and get right to the point. I agree with you on the last paragraph. Irony is unpredictable whether it is good or bad, Irony just happens. No matter what happens in yours or my life, we will always have some kind of Irony take place. Good job on the easy just work on getting to the important detail and you will not have nomore problems.

Anonymous said...

Michael Patrick,
I heard in your piece that irony to you is something that happens which is unexpected. You feel that you can’t control what will happen because you don’t know that it will happen.

I noticed that you had a good sense of what irony is but your body paragraphs don’t support your definition of irony. You had good examples from each story but I feel they just didn’t support your definition of irony.

I wondered what you meant in your third paragraph. It wasn’t clear when you said irony could not be controlled because it’s spontaneous so you could avoid it. I don’t understand how you could avoid something if it’s spontaneous and could not be controlled.

Anonymous said...

Christina Parrila,

I heard that you find irony to be something unexpected. You feel irony is a part of life even if you don’t notice that its there weather you like it or not. I do agree that many people are told or think something will happen one way but turn out completely different then what you expected or thought at times.

I noticed your opening paragraph. I liked how you defined irony and how it applies to you and your life. That paragraph catches other’s attention. Your examples from each story help support your definition of irony well. You gave many good examples from each story.

I didn’t really have any questions after reading your piece. There proofread a couple of your sentences and your piece will be fine.

Anonymous said...

Christina Paralla, I heard you wrote something on irony and the poem of Richard Cory you really captured the irony in that poem and you gave good example of the characteristics of Mr. Richard Cory and you really got the point of the poem. I noticed that you put a lot of detail on what the reader should look for when they talk about and read about irony. Well I wonder what shows that Richard was troubled. And you also did another on “lamb to the slaughter” the thing that attracted me to this short story I thought it was going to talk about lambs put it talks about a woman using a lamb to kill her husband. You also put in the details on how the woman would act when to police was there you also did a piece about “The House Saves Built” written by Gardiner Harris, you really got the point across one house slave built it but only the white people could live in the house and now we have an African American can live in the house

Anonymous said...

Hi Christina Parrila,


I heard you say that irony is when is when something completely unexpected happens. Also you said the story "Richard Cory" by Edwin Arlington Robinson, was about a man who was praised for his wealth and look so happy but ironically one night shot himself.

What I noticed that attracted my attention was your definition of irony because it relates to mine. You stated that’s it was something unexpected that happened. You also gave an example and said how it does exist in your everyday life.

I wonder if using examples from the story, instead of paraphrasing, will help convey your understanding. It could possibly give the reader a better understanding of what you have read.

Anonymous said...

Dear Hazel,

I heard: the piece was about things occurring Ironically and How things turn out to be very different than what you thought. I seen that this was the main idea of this essay.

I noticed: that you put emphasis on a few words to stress the importance of your point to your readers and I like that. I also realized that you have a clear understanding of Irony and you would be able to explain it to someone else if needed.

I wonder: what you meant when you said, “The general who started off as the hunter had became the hunted at the end of the story and Rainsford who was the hunted became the hunter.” That confused me a little bit but other than that, I think you did a wonderful job.

Anonymous said...

Kevin Behrman

Alexia Velez

Through reading your interpretation of irony I saw that you showed detail in some of the different stories I read. I understood the point you were trying to make by showing how irony is a part in everyday life. You showed how a rich beloved man wasn’t satisfied and took his life, or how a poor woman wanted to belong to rich group and ended up putting herself in a hole for trying too hard.
I noticed while reading your version of what irony is that u used quotation from some of the text to show how irony was tied into the story. It was good but I thought u needed more detail in the rest of your essay. If you showed more detail to the story “The Necklace” and the article “The House That Slaves Built” then I think I would have been more focused in your writing.
I wondered if you understood the stories completely. It would have been nice to see more description about the stories. I personally understood your writing. For the next time just use more details to prove your point and you will be good.

Anonymous said...

Hello Christine I thank you for your opinion on my work. I saw some of your work as well and was curious to the story of the monkey’s paw. What exactly happened that was ironic to the father and son you speak of? I think you could have explained the story more it sounds interesting. How has irony affected you and your life? give an example since you have such a great understanding on what irony is.

Anonymous said...

dear mike P. We're on the same track when you said its shocking to see a straight A student get a bad grade. On the short story, I was just trying to look for irony rather than finish reading the whole thing that's why I thought the ironic part was towards the end. I conclude that Rainsford died because it says "He had never slept in a better bed, Rainsford decided." I think they should change the name of the white house because now that we have a black president, pretty soon we'll have a latin president or asian. My final answer to your question is that I think it was named the white house because people were only going to let that certain colored race become a president.

Anonymous said...

Dear Munique, I'm glad you found humor in my first paragraph because finding humor is part of a habit of mind. I put "something" because I was rushing and just wanted to get the work done faster. Then you noticed that in the last 2 paragraphs. I now learn that I have to evolve typing up a summary of a short story so that readers like you could understand what I wrote better.

Anonymous said...

Hello Hazel thank you for writing to me you pointed out a mistake I made in my work I didn’t mean you could avoid it I meant you couldn’t avoid it. I appreciate you pointing that out and I will change it immediately. Sorry for the confusion as well I’ll be more cautious when I am working on my next assignment. Maybe you will have a better understanding now on my definition of irony. If not then just respond and ill try to give more detail as to what I mean. Great job on your work to your definition of irony is very clear, and gives me a lot to reflect on.

Anonymous said...

Christine Cedeno, I heard you wrote something on Irony and that “The
Monkeys Paw” by W.W Jacobs was a good example of irony. I learned that we have a choice but you never know the out come. I noticed that you did also another piece on when the White House was built which also has a little irony like when you state in you own words that “African Americans slaves built the house but only white men stood in the presence of the house,” Which history was being made when the president Barack Obama got elected and know an African American know lives in the white house. I didn’t know that it was taboo for having African American in the White House and also about the woman who was crying not cause she was sad but because she danced with the president and it was rare that an African American gets to dance with President. You also put that irony is everywhere in books and every day life.

Anonymous said...

Michael Patrick

Good opening! I liked how you defined irony in a way that anyone can understand and you also gave a personal example of how irony exists in everyday situations. While reading your version of what irony was I was hooked by the detail that you put into your essay. It gave me a clear picture of what irony is. Personally I have nothing negative to say about your writing. To make a long story short you gave enough detail to hook a reader and help us understand what the situation was in each story or article. Great Job!
I noticed the detail in your writing. You gave enough examples to let us readers know that you understand what you read and your able to help us know what’s going on in the stories and articles so that we don’t have to read it. We can get a basic summary out of your description.
I wonder why did you choose out of all stories to read about “The Most Dangerous Game”? What attracted you to this story? Great Job!

Anonymous said...

Hey Christine,


I Heard you say that you use Irony and sarcasim together I find that it often happens to me too. I also noticed you questioned the story making me want to know more about what this story was about.

What I noticed is by your detailing, you had a good understanding of what this story was actually about. I also noticed how you stated irony was a way of entertaining which I agree. You used a lot of examples that better helped me understand what you believe and read. That being said I think it was a over all good essay.

I wonder what the whole story The Monkey's Paw by W.W Jacobs was about, your summary made me wonder more about its whole plot.

Anonymous said...

Davon,

I heard you say that it was ironic that everyone thought Richard was a nice guy who was rich and your examples and quotes from the story complemented your work to make me interested in what you were saying.

I noticed that you and I have the same meaning of irony, which made me completely understand what you were saying. I liked how you gave an example from your life that maybe some of us can relate to.

I wonder if maybe a little more detailing would make your work stand out more so that a reader can have a better view of what you have read.